Monday November 7, 2011 Online Class Assignment

1. After reviewing the information about the drafting introduction on page 3, review your own intro and decide what you can do to:
a. more clearly show what is at stake for your issue:
-what is at stake is weather or not I can truthfully argue the point of not needing to have a degree to be smart.
-can I give good explains of showing you don’t need a degree
-be able to agrue the other side as well
b. more thoroughly contextualize your issue with background information (this is helpful for both intro and conclusion) :
-think of some good explains
c. write a few sentences for a. and b. that you will insert into your next draft.:
- In this world most people think having a degree is what makes you smart, when really even people with degrees can make stupid decicion.

2. Review your topic sentences of your body paragraphs:
a. Whether you are doing org. plan 1 or 2, your topic sentences should contain the criteria that you are discussing in the paragraph. (Review bottom of page 4 and all of page 5). :
-in the first part I want to talk about my views on being intelligent and how a degree isn’t really what should determane if someone is intelligent.
b. If you have any main topic sentences (do at least two here) that don’t contain the criteria of your definition that you are about to discuss in your paragraph, paste the old sentence, then write the revision of it that you will change in your next draft, like this:
i. OLD SENTENCE: What to say that a baccalaureate is the only thing to show someone is intelligent?
ii. NEW SENTENCE What to say that a baccalaureate is the only thing to show someone is intelligent? Because there are tons of people in the world who have made a lot in their world without it.
3. Now, go through your body paragraphs and make sure that in the evidence sections of them, you are “developing” the criterion you are discussing, which means: explaining/defining each criterion for your definition. By the end of your paper, we should be able to tell a) your definitions, b) the criteria for those definitions, and c) the definitions of those criteria. (Look at page 5, description of BP1).
a. Find your shortest body paragraph. This is a quick way to determine which one needs more development. : my first paragraph

b. Paste it in.: What is to say that a baccalaureate is the only thing to show someone is intelligent? If that was true then people like Bill Gates and Steve Jobs must be stupid. Theses two didn't get their baccalaureate yet they make more money than most people who do have their baccalaureate. In the fashion world you just have to be creative and know how to start trends or how to make them even better than they already are. They did not have to go to school to learn how to design great clothes or other things. All they need was there own mind and I great sense of designing. They did have to learn how to sew and how to make colors look good together. Or even how to sell and show off the clothes that they have design. Even people who want to do other careers, with in reason, can do it to. Now there are a lot of people who do have their baccalaureate and they can be really stupid. They sometime make descion based on the book when sometimes they should use common sense..

c. Then paste in a revision of it that contains more details and explanations of the criterion under discussion.:

- What is to say that a baccalaureate is the only thing to show someone is intelligent? If that was true then people like Bill Gates and Steve Jobs must be stupid. Theses two didn't get their baccalaureate yet they make more money than most people who do have their baccalaureate. In the fashion world you just have to be creative and know how to start trends or how to make them even better than they already are. They did not have to go to school to learn how to design great clothes or other things. All they need was there own mind and I great sense of designing. They did have to learn how to sew and how to make colors look good together. Or even how to sell and show off the clothes that they have design. Even people who want to do other careers, with in reason, can do it to. Now there are a lot of people who do have their baccalaureate and they can be really stupid. They sometime make descion based on the book when sometimes they should use common sense.


4. Look over one of your rebuttal areas. If you have one (and you should; “considering the opposition” or “other viewpoints” is on the rubric) look for a way to revise it to be more developed, if you don’t have one, make one now to add into your next draft. Review page 6 and the ways that you 1) acknowledge opposition to your argument, 2) but prove how the opposition is not strong enough to invalidate your argument.

a. I hadn’t gotten around to that yet in your first draft and make one up now to include in your next draft.